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So, it’s been a while since my first creepypasta story. Just gonna warn you, it’s pretty shitty in comparison to my first. This is because I’m not good when it comes to the third person perspective...at all.

Having just murdered his 999,999,999th victim, he was ready to kill his final target. He arrived at the house while it was still night time, with the stars twinkling in the inky black sky. With no impediment, he opened the door, and was planning to go straight to the target. Said target was female, and in her 20’s. He did this in order to eliminate any chance reproduction, that would continue the family bloodline.

The girl was in the front room, simply cleaning up. The being crept through the house, to get to the front room. The house was very large, a mansion in fact, and the front room just had to be at the end of the most complicated routes throughout the house. As he was slowly creeping through the house, he heard the woman suddenly stop, as if she had heard him. He continued walking to the front room, and heard fast footsteps, and a bunch of things being moved about. The very breathe of the woman, he could hear. She was terrified, he could feel the fear in the air itself.

He entered the room, and a frightened, adult, blonde haired woman was backed into a corner, with a knife in her hand.

“Typical. The victim always cowers in fear when I come into their lives. Hehe."

“What do you want?" The girl said.

“Even more typical, hahahahaha! I feel like you pesky bugs are all the same." He decided to come closer, and this time, the air around began to condense into a knife, inside of the man’s hand.

He charged towards the woman, and the woman was surprisingly nimble, evading it and escaping the room, into another.

“Hmm, heading towards the door, I see? Not happening."

He could hear the woman banging on the door, in an attempt to get out.

“It’s always the same old thing."

He smiled seductively.

“But then again, it’s always fun, when they’re running in terror."

He disappeared from where he was, and appeared right in front of the girl.

The girl screamed, and charged at him instead, this time. The man caught the blade with his own hand, even touching the blade. Though, no blood came out.

“You won’t be harming any time soon."

The girl pulled on the knife as hard as she could, but the knife wouldn’t budge. He let go, and the girl hit the wall behind her.

He drew his blade up to her neck, and was about to initiate the kill...but he wouldn’t do that, not yet anyways.

“You know, I have something to show you."

The man, turned completely blue, and into a roundish mass. The woman’s terror subsided for a while, not knowing what was going to happen.

The blue mass engulfed her, and she screamed, while struggling to get out. As the mass slid off of her, she was now in a barren wasteland, with thousands of dead bodies strewn across the land. All mutilated, and without eyes.

“Do you like my handy work? I did it myself."

The woman had no idea where this voice was coming from, and she had chills go up her spine as he proceeded to talk again.

“Let’s have a little fun."

The woman had no time to react as a sword was thrust-ed through her stomach.

She wanted to say something, but she couldn’t. She was his plaything now.

The sword lifted her body up, before pointing straight down at the ground. She was then smashed into the ground, and impaled continuously by the sword.

Torture similar to this happened nearly endlessly, and the being took pleasure in her pain. But alas, it was time to end it.

The girl couldn’t struggle against a being who made her a rag-doll in every sense of the word. This time the man appeared in front of her, and he didn’t seem to have any weapon with him.

Being grabbed by the neck, the man began hardening his grip, more, and more, before her snapped off of her body, like a twig. And thus, he had killed his last victim. He had laid his trap. Now all he has to do is wait.


That’s it. Pretty short, eh?


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Name of creepypasta?


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Mephistopheles wrote: Name of creepypasta?


IDK.
I didn’t give it a name.
I guess I’ll call it the final victim.
It fits with the story itself.


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Mephistopheles wrote: Name of creepypasta?



'The day Broly assraped me'

by PG13


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Gyarados wrote:

Mephistopheles wrote: Name of creepypasta?



'The day Broly assraped me'

by PG13



Lol.


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Gyarados wrote:

Mephistopheles wrote: Name of creepypasta?



'The day Broly assraped me'

by PG13


People are STILL using Broly, eh?
I have a secret to tell...
I don’t care about him anymore...stop using him.
I might like Broly, just not as much, so just stop using him.


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I can’t fap to this.


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ProGamer13 wrote:

Gyarados wrote:

Mephistopheles wrote: Name of creepypasta?



'The day Broly assraped me'

by PG13

Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,
Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,
Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,Broly,
Broly!!!!!



Ok dude, chill out


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ProGamer13 wrote:

Gyarados wrote:

Mephistopheles wrote: Name of creepypasta?



'The day Broly assraped me'

by PG13


People are STILL using Broly, eh?
I have a secret to tell...
I don’t care about him anymore...stop using him.
I might like Broly, just not as much, so just stop using him.



http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/NeverLiveItDown


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Agent. wrote: I can’t fap to this.


There’s always porn.
smiley


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Gyarados wrote:

ProGamer13 wrote:

Gyarados wrote:

Mephistopheles wrote: Name of creepypasta?



'The day Broly assraped me'

by PG13

Pingas.



Ok dude, chill out


Whatevs.


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Should include a part where a big, psychotic inbred fingers someone in the ear until their brains are all mixed up and mushy

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ProGamer13 wrote:

Gyarados wrote:

ProGamer13 wrote:

Gyarados wrote:

Mephistopheles wrote: Name of creepypasta?



'The day Broly assraped me'

by PG13

Pingas.



Ok dude, chill out


I’m gay for Broly’s green jizz



Ok


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Gyarados wrote:

ProGamer13 wrote:

Gyarados wrote:

ProGamer13 wrote:

Gyarados wrote:

Mephistopheles wrote: Name of creepypasta?



'The day Broly assraped me'

by PG13

Pingas.



Ok dude, chill out


I’m gay for Broly’s green jizz



Ok


The Broly joke has gotten old...


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Now for the conclusion to write...
this will feature the bloodline that started it all.


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Where’s the plot twist? No tension was even built up!


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SonGokuIsHere wrote: Where’s the plot twist? No tension was even built up!


I’m not very good at stories. I kind of did it while in a lazy state.


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ProGamer13 wrote:

Gyarados wrote:

ProGamer13 wrote:

Gyarados wrote:

ProGamer13 wrote:

Gyarados wrote:

Mephistopheles wrote: Name of creepypasta?



'The day Broly assraped me'

by PG13

Pingas.



Ok dude, chill out


I’m gay for Broly’s green jizz



Ok


I will carry my burning love for Broly even as I grow old



Ok


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Cool.

My turn, i guess it isn’t that scary.
I’ll make sure part 2 is creepy.
(Made it up on the spot so my bad if it sux)


There was a man who worked as teacher, a math teacher in-fact. He loved math so much his name was the number 69. His favorite thing to do as a child was subtract, in his childhood he would get a piece of paper, place random numbers down and just subtract. He would subtract every number by any other number he sees in sight just for fun. He also liked to draw, he once drew the scene of 2 stickmen sitting across from each other at a desk, they had a piece of paper sitting in-between them on their desk. His mom walked by with a plate that consisted of barbecued burgers (Sorry Cid), and barbecue sauce. One thing that was odd was she had no face, but he made no comment on that. Suddenly she tripped over one of his pencils and the plate fell to the floor, it shattered and the barbecue sauce splattered all over one of the stick figures in his drawing. He quickly made his way to the kitchen, grabbed a napkin and wiped the sauce of the stickfigure, by the time he did, the head of the stick figure was smudged. He swore upon himself never to draw again because it might get messed up.

Back to his life as a teacher:
He had a class of 24 students, they were a good class. There were 2 students in particular who always caused trouble and wreaked havoc upon the class. Their names were Jeremy and Felix. Jeremy tends to throw paper airplanes, hurl spit-balls at the front of the class when the teacher isn’t looking, and yell in the middle of a lesson. Felix usually teases other students, often distracting them from their work.

It was a shiny day with a glistening sky, the teacher felt that today would be a great day. 69 sat at the front of his class, waiting for it to start. A sudden announcement came up “Class will be starting in 5 hours”. The teacher was confused, the time was 10 A.M and school usually started around that time. He decided to call the office and ask them what’s going on, but his classroom phone wasn’t in the usual location, it wasn’t there at all.

He decided to speak to the office the office personally because he had something special planned for the class. He walked through the hall, getting freaked out by the fact there were no windows, they were there when he entered the school this morning. he walked faster, another thing that was weird was the railing of the stairs weren’t there. Any more, the interior of the school was becoming blank, which made him feel uneasy. He felt a tinge of fear in his stomach, but decided to ignore it and keep walking.

He made his way to the office and the principle sat there at the front desk. He opened the door to the office, walked in and sat down. He opened his mouth to talk to the principle, only he didn’t. He had no mouth. The principle looked at him with a puzzled expression. Eventually 69 felt a sharp pain in his head, like it was going to explode, then he heard shattering....

Edited 06-23-2014 04:39 PM by Insaiyan
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ProGamer13 wrote:

SonGokuIsHere wrote: Where’s the plot twist? No tension was even built up!


I’m not very good at stories. I kind of did it while in a lazy state.


If you want to, look up “Journey To Hell”. It’s my first creepypasta. It’s better than this, that’s for sure. But it’s in the first person perspective.


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