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Be Honest-

Boy u better stay on track
Dont disrespect me
dont turn your back
Unless you want your spinal chord 2 crack



I spread the lies and the rumors
I’m not stoping, just constantly growing
You still dont get it
I’AM THE TUMOR

I’ll simplify it
You cant get rid of me
Im the Bark on the tree
The Longest killing spree



What
what’s wrong
Im just saying the truth
9/11
The collinbine
The 3rd Crusade

WW II
Black Slavery
All that Havoc I made


Pure Evil
I make all Dreams fade
Like the Johnson boys
All are big but one is a shade
So I skecth him back in



Maybe I’ll consume some one in his life
Some one with a bible name
Some one Eric tried to give advice


Lets make him realy annoying
His presents more painful
Than getting shot in the groin


Come into my abyss
My dark black heart
Snacthed you right up
I knew you wern’t spirituly smart
So I burned you with my fire
than popped you back out
like your favorite pop-tart


Come on buddy
lets be friends
listen to this music
lets start new trends


Yes
pull me closer to your soul
So i can burb it crispy
like BBQ char-cole

Finaly
almost completely dark
Your heart is where i cause your Frieght
wait...................................................................

Whats that light
Something is blinding me from the sky
Please not the holly crown
NO, I was almost there
Know I must dark, hide, and fleed
I had to much greed
I realy tried to take your all your belief and creed

I thought I was killing you
But I just made you bleed
All because of God’s holy seed

My birth was before the earth
I know exacly what this planet is worth









I caused this all
My mission is to make all humnas fall.


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No one likes it?


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04-25-2008 12:03 PM
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I liked it. It is a bit dark in placers but cheery in other placers. its like two different ppl did it. Did you do it in two different days by any chance?

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pluto wrote: I liked it. It is a bit dark in placers but cheery in other placers. its like two different ppl did it. Did you do it in two different days by any chance?




yea, its God and the Devil.

I dont want it to seem dark or any thing.

Just the truth.


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98supra wrote:

pluto wrote: I liked it. It is a bit dark in placers but cheery in other placers. its like two different ppl did it. Did you do it in two different days by any chance?




yea, its God and the Devil.

I dont want it to seem dark or any thing.

Just the truth.



It doesn’t say anywhere that’s its called God and the Devil. It would be a good thing to call it and now you have said that it makes a lot more sense. It really is very good and well thought out now I know the tittle.

Edited 04-25-2008 12:07 PM by pluto
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pluto wrote:

98supra wrote:

pluto wrote: I liked it. It is a bit dark in placers but cheery in other placers. its like two different ppl did it. Did you do it in two different days by any chance?




yea, its God and the Devil.

I dont want it to seem dark or any thing.

Just the truth.



It doesn’t say anywhere that’s its called God and the Devil. It would be a good thing to call it and now you have said that it makes a lot more sense. It really is very good and well thought out now I know the tittle.




Thanx


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Bump


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Sounds. Ummm, painful.rr


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Dhem92 wrote: Sounds. Ummm, painful.rr



lol, a little pain.


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So you caused this

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aquamarine wrote: So you caused this



No, That was the devil talking.


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Haha, good one

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The fuck should I know what you think of it?


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Rogue wrote: The fuck should I know what you think of it?




Um................................................
ok, If u dont like just say it.


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