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Ulquiorra Schiffer wrote: Pretty good Chilly.And this is coming from somebody who when the teachers say “it’s time to read some poetry"groans in boredom.And funny thing.Your twin brothers name is the same as my dads.



Thanks Schiff, means a lot coming from another twin.


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Geass wrote: Chilly,that was the only Poem I ever liked and actually understanded.




Geass, again, your opinion means a lot to me, coming from a twin. You and Schiff stay tight for the rest of your lives and I hope they are long.


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God Damn Chilly.

You got some serious tallent mate.

Sure it could use a bit of polish and some of the stanzas were a bit of and jarring, but has to be said..that; even with the errors was pretty bloody good.

I would seriously keep it up mate. From one poet to another, you got some mad skills, excellent material to draw upon and with a little bit of polish, could be groundbreakingly amazing.

Tops shelf stuff mate.

Seriously. hats off to you.

Bravogrin


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OMG Wolf, Thanks, that means more than anyone else because of...well...you know. I just posted something after your post on Inherent Evil. Please understand, I was joking around.


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Edited 04-30-2009 02:37 AM by Chilly man
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Just something I threw togther..kinda inspired by Chilly to write something spontanious.

The unrelenting night.

Alone in the rain yet together as one
I held her so tightly, we had no where to run
The skies thundered loudly, light streaked the sky
Oh why oh dear lord did she have to die.

The evening. it started, much-like any other
I went to her house, said hello to her mother
She gathered her things and bid all a farewell
The night was still young when we steped into the world

We gazed at eachother. what were we to do?
Our options so many, the limits so few.
We couldn’t decide so we left on a walk
Hardly noticed the clouds as we paced and we talked.

The eve became night as we entered a park
Its sure getting cold she said with a laugh
I offered my jacket and she accpeted with a smile
You can take it if you need it but I said I’d be fine.

The wind it grew colder, the skies they grew dark
Looks like it might rain, we should get out of the park
She nooded in aggrement and we made down the paths
still in high sprits, still packed full of laughs

Nobody was out, they’d probably think us insane
The two strange young people walking round in the rain
We were both soaked, our clothes drapped all heavy and wet
She challenged 'I’ll beat you home', I said wanna bet.

So off we both raced, launched out into the street.
The rain fell more heavy, a blanket thicker than sleet
She ran and I chased her; water flew off her back
she always was faster and she knew of that fact

It was cold and it was wet, I remember the feeling
As she turned round to see me, a stone sent her reeling
She slipped and she fell in the middle of the road
I laughed but I shouldn’t have, said she looked like a toad.

What happen next, it was all but a blur
A car it came speeding, it didn’t see her
The seconds slowed down as I begged it to stop
The cars tires screetched and the brakes they locked up

The cars Bumper met face with a sickening crack
She must have tried to get up but instead was knocked back
And thats were I found her in the centre of the road
My poor dear lil baby no longer looked like a toad.

The driver he sped off, not bothering to look
At the girl he had hit, at the life he just took
I cradled her head as she bled in my arms
Her cold eyes stared up at me, no longer they sparked

Why oh god why we go out tonight, why did we strive
If we’d just stayed at home, she’d still be alive
The skies thundered loudly, light streaked the sky
Oh why oh dear lord did she have to die.


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Scott,

That was tender and beautiful. Your words touched my heart and I could feel your pain. Your lost love is still in your heart, not replaced, but joined by another love. I am sad and happy for you at the same time. Your loss was so deep. I am happy that you were blessed with another beautiful love. May your happiness never end.


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Chilly man wrote: Scott,

That was tender and beautiful. Your words touched my heart and I could feel your pain. Your lost love is still in your heart, not replaced, but joined by another love. I am sad and happy for you at the same time. Your loss was so deep. I am happy that you were blessed with another beautiful love. May your happiness never end.




Thank you, but that wasn’t based on anything in particular, just me working my magic with words. I’m a writer and can create just about anythinggrin

Its nice to know that it does seem real and tender though. it means I succeeded.

Thanks mangrin


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Chilly man wrote: Ronnie


Born together, we clung to each other,
Twas so warm and safe inside our dear Mother.
Then our world collapsed, all violence and noise,
We heard a strange voice say, “You’ve got two boys”.
Slapped on our butts we started to cry,
World upside down, heads low, feet high.

We grew and learned love for our parents and each other,
I finally learned, I had a twin brother.
Our thoughts were as one, our hearts were in sync,
We played together, ran with our arms linked.
I’d say, “Mommy can we..." and you’d say "...play outside?"
We’d play Hide and Seek, knowing where the other would hide.

We faced the world as one, knowing each others thought,
When we had done wrong, we always both got caught.
We lived, we loved, we had so much fun,
We slept together, when the daytime was done.
Our lives were so happy even when we were tested,
How were we to know, we were being molested.

As the years went by it finally stopped,
The monsters were gone, they were caught by the cops.
We learned from our Dad, those actions were wrong,
But we still had longings, we had done them so long.
We talked to each other, our minds both the same,
Our Dad tried to help, told us we weren’t to blame.

Life passes so quick, in a blink it is gone,
Suddenly were twelve, we faced a new dawn.
One day we were playing, just crossing the street,
You saw the car that we couldn’t beat.
You pushed me and shoved me out of the way,
You gave your life for me on that terrible day.

My heart had been broken, I felt empty and dead,
Where were your thoughts that I heard in my head?
I laid in our bed, so empty and cold,
no longer a child, feeling so old.
In your coffin I looked, my eyes filled with tears,
How would I live, throughout all the years.

My heart was just half, the other was gone,
No more would I wake and smile at the dawn.
No more would I play with happiness and glee,
So lonely my life, because it’s just me.
I look at our pictures and just sit and cry,
I loved you my brother, I just wish I’d die.



Hey Chilly Man

Wow you’ve been holding out on us! lol. That is a great poem! I mean it!!! You should write them all down in a book. You never know one day you may get published.

Writing down your feelings in this way can be a good cathartic release too.

I’m so sorry that you feel so sad. It must be really hard to live every day without him, but like I mentioned to you before, he would want you to have a good life and be happy. He’s still with you in your mind and heart. Peace be with you. smiley


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Chilly dood wrote: “Moviecodec”


In lonliness I searched the etherial sites,
I longed for friends, spent interminal nights.
I searched and I searched and found nothing good,
Then, lo and behold, found a great net neighborhood.

I saw many people, some good and some bad,
But mostly great people, it made me so glad.
I laughed and I laughed, but then came a tear,
My brother would love them, if he was just here.

I said to myself, quit trying to cry,
I need to get over the fact that he died.
I need to have friends, need to fill the void in my heart,
So, I decided to join, to get a new start.

At first I tried to be me, but I sounded too snobby,
I made people mad, I feared they would drop me.
So, I watched and I watched and I learned how to talk,
To sound like these guys, to be able to talk their talk.

Finally, it happened, I made some good friends,
Dear God, I do thank you, hope this never ends.
But I made some dudes mad, made them dislike me,
Made them wish that they could just fight me.

I found one special lady, she was just like my Mom,
Before Mom got so sad from missing her Ron.
My new special friend, so sweet and so nice,
Tried to help me and teach me with her good advice.

But sadly my drama, made people so mad,
I ranted and raved, but this was my bad.
The more that I talked, the more that I cried,
The more foolish I looked, inside I just died.

I still had some friends, some people that cared,
But would they stay with me, after my soul had been bared?
People saw inside my soul, saw my true freakish self,
I sounded so stupid, like a demented elf.

How can I make them take me as serious?
I sound like a dope, sound so delerious.
My mind’s at a loss, don’t know what to do,
My good friends then told me, “Chilly, just be YOU”.

God help me, I love them so much,
Heal me please, Lord, with your tender touch.
He told me, “Dear Richie, my poor messed up son,
You’re there to make friends, to laugh, to have fun."

“Just be respectful, be gentle, be kind.
You’ll see they still love you, see they know your mind,
You can make jokes, have fun, and be sometimes serious,
Just cut back on sex talk, and don’t act mysterious."

“They’ll learn how to trust you, and slowly they’ll learn,
You just want some friends, from your heart do you yearn.
So go back and talk, be funny or sad.
Let them know that you love them, know you’re a good lad."

So, hear I am with my hat in my hand,
I’m sorry my friends, you’re the best in the land.
Please forgive me (again), I love you so much,
I’ll try not to be crazy, try to show my funny touch.

I’m “Richie The Kid”, I’m quick on the draw,
I’m the Chiller dood, not afraid of the law.
But now I’ll be serious and tell you the truth,
I am what I say, but I can be uncouth.

So, again, please forgive me and give me a chance,
I’ll try to be goodly and not get in your pants.
I just want your friendship, my life to enhanse,
But hey, if you like me, could you teach me to dance?

Richie



Hey Richie this is the person we want to see!!!
I’m sorry you have had such a hard time lately.
Your friends now they see you, for who you really are....
And for once your not letting the sex talk get too far!!

Well done on the growth that you have just had
Now you shouldn’t get many more people so mad
Just be yourself that is all you need to do
And then good things in life will happen to you!

Thank you for your appology! smiley


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bump


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Thanks for bumping that Butter, I didn’t even see your posts. What you said was not only very nice, it was poetic. I’m trying to tone down the sex talk but it’s hard cuz some of it seeps out a my ears, but I am trying not to be overly vulgar. If I go too far I pray that you are someone (like Etain) tells me. My brain is always about two blocks behind my mouth. By the way, I really like Wolf’s poem about losing a lover. It was so sincere and emotional I thot it was true. He told me it wasn’t. Thanks again.


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Chilly man wrote: Thanks for bumping that Butter, I didn’t even see your posts. What you said was not only very nice, it was poetic. I’m trying to tone down the sex talk but it’s hard cuz some of it seeps out a my ears, but I am trying not to be overly vulgar. If I go too far I pray that you are someone (like Etain) tells me. My brain is always about two blocks behind my mouth. By the way, I really like Wolf’s poem about losing a lover. It was so sincere and emotional I thot it was true. He told me it wasn’t. Thanks again.



No problems smiley


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04-30-2009 08:42 PM
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butterfly wrote:

Chilly man wrote: Ronnie


Born together, we clung to each other,
Twas so warm and safe inside our dear Mother.
Then our world collapsed, all violence and noise,
We heard a strange voice say, “You’ve got two boys”.
Slapped on our butts we started to cry,
World upside down, heads low, feet high.

We grew and learned love for our parents and each other,
I finally learned, I had a twin brother.
Our thoughts were as one, our hearts were in sync,
We played together, ran with our arms linked.
I’d say, “Mommy can we..." and you’d say "...play outside?"
We’d play Hide and Seek, knowing where the other would hide.

We faced the world as one, knowing each others thought,
When we had done wrong, we always both got caught.
We lived, we loved, we had so much fun,
We slept together, when the daytime was done.
Our lives were so happy even when we were tested,
How were we to know, we were being molested.

As the years went by it finally stopped,
The monsters were gone, they were caught by the cops.
We learned from our Dad, those actions were wrong,
But we still had longings, we had done them so long.
We talked to each other, our minds both the same,
Our Dad tried to help, told us we weren’t to blame.

Life passes so quick, in a blink it is gone,
Suddenly were twelve, we faced a new dawn.
One day we were playing, just crossing the street,
You saw the car that we couldn’t beat.
You pushed me and shoved me out of the way,
You gave your life for me on that terrible day.

My heart had been broken, I felt empty and dead,
Where were your thoughts that I heard in my head?
I laid in our bed, so empty and cold,
no longer a child, feeling so old.
In your coffin I looked, my eyes filled with tears,
How would I live, throughout all the years.

My heart was just half, the other was gone,
No more would I wake and smile at the dawn.
No more would I play with happiness and glee,
So lonely my life, because it’s just me.
I look at our pictures and just sit and cry,
I loved you my brother, I just wish I’d die.



Hey Chilly Man

Wow you’ve been holding out on us! lol. That is a great poem! I mean it!!! You should write them all down in a book. You never know one day you may get published.

Writing down your feelings in this way can be a good cathartic release too.

I’m so sorry that you feel so sad. It must be really hard to live every day without him, but like I mentioned to you before, he would want you to have a good life and be happy. He’s still with you in your mind and heart. Peace be with you. smiley




I didn’t see this one either. Thanks Butterfly. You’re such a nice lady.


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My secret love


My love flies to me on ethereal wings,
'Tis so wonderful to feel the joy that she brings.
Her words pierce my heart like cupid’s quick arrows,
I hear her words in my mind like the song of the sparrows.

I crave her messages, I wait just to hear,
Her words in my puter, so sweet and so dear.
She lightens my heart, she quickens my pulse,
She talks and she laughs and she gives me some luls.

I know what she looks like, her description was clear,
But I know her sweet heart, I have nothing to fear.
I have a big crush on this girl here on-line,
If we never meet it will prolly be fine.

For I have known love now, my heart has been healed,
That hole in my heart has been mended and healed.
I sit here and wait to see her come on,
I’ll sit here all night till mornings sweet dawn.

I’m happy, I’m free, I feel so alive,
I’ve found a good friend, and that ain’t no jive.
So, come to me sweet angel, and bring me some joy,
I love you so much, I’m one happy boy.

Richie


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Chilly man wrote: Amber


My love flies to me on etherial wings,
'Tis so wonderful to feel the joy that she brings.
Her words pierce my heart like cupid’s quick arrows,
I hear her words in my mind like the song of the sparrows.

I crave her messages, I wait just to hear,
Her words in my puter, so sweet and so dear.
She lightens my heart, she quickens my pulse,
She talks and she laughs and she gives me some luls.

I know what she looks like, her description was clear,
But I know her sweet heart, I have nothing to fear.
I have a big crush on this girl here on-line,
If we never meet it will prolly be fine.

For I have known love now, my heart has been healed,
That hole in my heart has been mended and healed.
I sit here and wait to see her come on,
I’ll sit here all night till mornings sweet dawn.

I’m happy, I’m free, I feel so alive,
I’ve found a good friend, and that ain’t no jive.
So, come to me sweet angel, and bring me some joy,
I love you so much, I’m one happy boy.

Richie


You mean ethereal?
GJ btw,i know who amber is now.


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The Surfer wrote:

Chilly man wrote: Amber


My love flies to me on etherial wings,
'Tis so wonderful to feel the joy that she brings.
Her words pierce my heart like cupid’s quick arrows,
I hear her words in my mind like the song of the sparrows.

I crave her messages, I wait just to hear,
Her words in my puter, so sweet and so dear.
She lightens my heart, she quickens my pulse,
She talks and she laughs and she gives me some luls.

I know what she looks like, her description was clear,
But I know her sweet heart, I have nothing to fear.
I have a big crush on this girl here on-line,
If we never meet it will prolly be fine.

For I have known love now, my heart has been healed,
That hole in my heart has been mended and healed.
I sit here and wait to see her come on,
I’ll sit here all night till mornings sweet dawn.

I’m happy, I’m free, I feel so alive,
I’ve found a good friend, and that ain’t no jive.
So, come to me sweet angel, and bring me some joy,
I love you so much, I’m one happy boy.

Richie


You mean ethereal?
GJ btw,i know who amber is now.



Thanks Surfer, see? You’re smarter than me. And just how do you know who she is (and don’t say her ID)?


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Chilly man wrote:

The Surfer wrote:

Chilly man wrote: Amber


My love flies to me on etherial wings,
'Tis so wonderful to feel the joy that she brings.
Her words pierce my heart like cupid’s quick arrows,
I hear her words in my mind like the song of the sparrows.

I crave her messages, I wait just to hear,
Her words in my puter, so sweet and so dear.
She lightens my heart, she quickens my pulse,
She talks and she laughs and she gives me some luls.

I know what she looks like, her description was clear,
But I know her sweet heart, I have nothing to fear.
I have a big crush on this girl here on-line,
If we never meet it will prolly be fine.

For I have known love now, my heart has been healed,
That hole in my heart has been mended and healed.
I sit here and wait to see her come on,
I’ll sit here all night till mornings sweet dawn.

I’m happy, I’m free, I feel so alive,
I’ve found a good friend, and that ain’t no jive.
So, come to me sweet angel, and bring me some joy,
I love you so much, I’m one happy boy.

Richie


You mean ethereal?
GJ btw,i know who amber is now.



Thanks Surfer, see? You’re smarter than me. And just how do you know who she is (and don’t say her ID)?


I was reading that conversation you had with her lover.


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The Surfer wrote:

Chilly man wrote:

The Surfer wrote:

Chilly man wrote: Amber


My love flies to me on etherial wings,
'Tis so wonderful to feel the joy that she brings.
Her words pierce my heart like cupid’s quick arrows,
I hear her words in my mind like the song of the sparrows.

I crave her messages, I wait just to hear,
Her words in my puter, so sweet and so dear.
She lightens my heart, she quickens my pulse,
She talks and she laughs and she gives me some luls.

I know what she looks like, her description was clear,
But I know her sweet heart, I have nothing to fear.
I have a big crush on this girl here on-line,
If we never meet it will prolly be fine.

For I have known love now, my heart has been healed,
That hole in my heart has been mended and healed.
I sit here and wait to see her come on,
I’ll sit here all night till mornings sweet dawn.

I’m happy, I’m free, I feel so alive,
I’ve found a good friend, and that ain’t no jive.
So, come to me sweet angel, and bring me some joy,
I love you so much, I’m one happy boy.

Richie


You mean ethereal?
GJ btw,i know who amber is now.



Thanks Surfer, see? You’re smarter than me. And just how do you know who she is (and don’t say her ID)?


I was reading that conversation you had with her lover.




WTF you talking about? Don’t YOU start this hating shit now too. I thought you were okay?


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what r u 2 talkin bout


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Chilly man wrote:

The Surfer wrote:

Chilly man wrote:

The Surfer wrote:

Chilly man wrote: Amber


My love flies to me on etherial wings,
'Tis so wonderful to feel the joy that she brings.
Her words pierce my heart like cupid’s quick arrows,
I hear her words in my mind like the song of the sparrows.

I crave her messages, I wait just to hear,
Her words in my puter, so sweet and so dear.
She lightens my heart, she quickens my pulse,
She talks and she laughs and she gives me some luls.

I know what she looks like, her description was clear,
But I know her sweet heart, I have nothing to fear.
I have a big crush on this girl here on-line,
If we never meet it will prolly be fine.

For I have known love now, my heart has been healed,
That hole in my heart has been mended and healed.
I sit here and wait to see her come on,
I’ll sit here all night till mornings sweet dawn.

I’m happy, I’m free, I feel so alive,
I’ve found a good friend, and that ain’t no jive.
So, come to me sweet angel, and bring me some joy,
I love you so much, I’m one happy boy.

Richie


You mean ethereal?
GJ btw,i know who amber is now.



Thanks Surfer, see? You’re smarter than me. And just how do you know who she is (and don’t say her ID)?


I was reading that conversation you had with her lover.




WTF you talking about? Don’t YOU start this hating shit now too. I thought you were okay?


I don’t follow?


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