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So i’ve always wondered, if i were writing a massive wall of text that someone says, do i have to paragraph it even if there are no interruptions between it? E.G:

“Speaks about WWII year one-year three."

and say each year lasts about a page in a book. Would i need to paragraph the speech or do you not need to paragraph speech?

edit: i gave up on the novel i was publishing here. it was distracting me from writing my actual novel.


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now type that into one sentence.


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Noriaki Tite Kubo wrote: now type that into one sentence.



eh?


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Dialogue follows somewhat different grammar rules when it comes to what a complete thought is.


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Zeed wrote: Dialogue follows somewhat different grammar rules when it comes to what a complete thought is.


but do i have to paragraph it.

so:

“Hitler was........."

new paragraph

“WWII started because”

or is it just:

“Hitler was......WWII started because”


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Goku sat down on the couch reading a magazine, he lowered the magazine after hearing footsteps at the door.
Chichi walked in with a look of joy on her face, which startled goku.

“Goku! Great news”

Goku slowly raised his arm to his face
“What is it?"

“I’m pregnant!"

He swiftly smacked the top of his forehead with his index and middle finger, sending a wave of air surging from the front of his face to the back of his head, followed by an ear splitting high-pitched noise; warping away shortly after.

I think so.


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Eien no yoru wrote: So i’ve always wondered, if i were writing a massive wall of text that someone says, do i have to paragraph it even if there are no interruptions between it? E.G:

“Speaks about WWII year one-year three."

and say each year lasts about a page in a book. Would i need to paragraph the speech or do you not need to paragraph speech?

edit: i gave up on the novel i was publishing here. it was distracting me from writing my actual novel.




You handle that “mission briefing/lecture” situation in a novel by inserting third persond descriptions of things happening during the speech. Mention how annoying character X finds this entire discussion, etc. This allows a good excuse to insert a paragraph break and reduce monotony, allowing you to deliver the intended information from the speaking character, while developing other issues and side plots of the characters, and without being too obvious.

Option 1:

Really important character says, “endless wall of text here."

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3 pages later resume....


Option 2:

Really important character starts speaking, “a paragraph or two."

Okay, what is everyone else thinking as he’s saying this? Are there servers distributing drinks? Talk about them, etc.

Important character is still talking, “blah, blah, your text here."

Break it up again with another character’s opinion, disruption, etc, if need be.

Study authors like Robert Jordan, Tolkien, even Timothy Zahn, or Willion Shatner, and notice how they break up their conversations while still delivering the needed content.


Robert Jordan could have three or four characters speaking on one page, or he could have a soliloquy or monologue that lasts several paragraphs, or he could be describing the scene in “third person all-knowing” mode and take ten pages to lay out how a village’s day-to-day operations go down. His rule seemed to be “when in doubt, break it down and add twice as many details," and it usually worked.


If you want to see an example of how this should work, search for “The Dragon Reborn” on Amazon, and you should be able to read the Prologue, the first chapter, and part of the second chapter for free.


There’s much more to monologues and dialogues than just the monologue or dialogue.

Edited 06-23-2014 10:54 PM by Wade
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Eien no yoru wrote: So i’ve always wondered, if i were writing a massive wall of text that someone says, do i have to paragraph it even if there are no interruptions between it? E.G:

“Speaks about WWII year one-year three."

and say each year lasts about a page in a book. Would i need to paragraph the speech or do you not need to paragraph speech?

edit: i gave up on the novel i was publishing here. it was distracting me from writing my actual novel.



Paragraphs are visual aids, used more to segment thoughts.

As others have stated, it’s typically better to interspace the thought with some non-quoted text. That said, you can get away with paragraphing it without those non-quoted bits, by leaving out the ending quotation mark in the one paragraph and continuing with an opening quotation mark in the next paragraph. For something that spans pages, though, you’d want to consider user’s interest.

Wade has the best general solution, though it depends on writing style, actual length of the text, importance of the quoted information...


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Think about a movie. If you have a situation where one character is giving a rather long speech of some sort, the camera often cuts to viewing the expressions and actions of other characters. This is particularly true in X-Men movies, or in Lord of the Rings and other similar movies. What’s going on here? If you read the book, these characters' expressions and thoughts (in the case of third person all-knowing,) were being written down during this speech. If you read the script you’ll see things like a note that the camera should pan to see Wolverine’s facial expressions and reactions whilst Xavier is speaking.

So a good technique would be imagining the scene as a movie, and then describing the scene as it would appear in a movie. This will enable you to expand the monologue into not only the informative content being delivered by a character to other characters as well as the audience, but also a full commentary and description of the personalities of other characters, as well as environmental concerns in the setting. When in doubt, add more details. Remember also, the speaker pauses to take a breath at some point, or maybe he hangs up looking at (his) audience members and pauses, and so on. These options give you room to break things up into paragraphs as well for ease of reading and a more pleasurable audience experience.

Edited 06-24-2014 09:15 AM by Wade
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Edited 06-24-2014 09:15 AM by Wade

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