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HELLBRINGER BOOK-1 ARCANE LORD CHAPTER IV

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again, apologies for lack of paragraphs but I’m not bothered to go and re-do them. please give feedback. (btw just for the record, i know making him say the name of his attack is kinda childish but i wrote it when i was nine and it’s kinda grown on me.) the next couple of chapters after this are ones I’ve written now.

IV

“A vampire.” I laughed. “You expect me to believe that?”
Dante looked bored and unimpressed. He stared at me watching me laugh. Then without warning, red swirled into his eyes, the air became thick with tension and he snarled producing an inhuman noise from his throat. He floated into the air slowly. Hovering there. I stopped laughing and stared at him. He opened his mouth wide and revealed a set of pointed razor sharp fangs. He held his hand outward showing off white claws. He had my complete attention now. Then he disappeared. One minute he was there and next thing he was gone. “I don’t joke around.” A deep voice thick with contempt whispered into my ear. I felt a thin sharp nail pressing against me neck. Not much pressure was applied at all yet I knew that a little movement would make all my blood spill out staining the white snow scarlet. “It seems you weren’t joking.” I showed no fear as I spoke.
Dante burst into laughter. “I wasn’t actually going to kill you. That wouldn’t be the best sign that I wanted to team up with you.” His nails shrunk and he slapped me on the shoulder.
“But if you are a vampire, how can you eat mist?” Liam questioned.
“Now that is a long story. But to make a long story short, my abilities are the normal things that a vampire has. Superhuman strength and speed, flight and I have to consume blood in order survive. I never consume human blood. I use animal blood. But I have another ability. Illusions. Me eating the mist was an illusion. I didn’t actually do it. Right now the mist is still here but my illusion powers are making it seem otherwise.”
“Well then.” I began. “Do you have any idea where Chaos is Dante?”
“Not a clue.” Dante smiled and gave me a thumbs up.
I sighed. “Well Liam, time for you to do your thing. Sense out Chaos.” Liam got up reluctantly and walked over to the edge of the mountain. Then he closed his eyes and pressed his palms together. A ripple of green Chi came out of him and spread throughout the entire area. He stayed in that position for three minutes and then he opened his eyes. “Got him.” Liam said. “Let’s go.” And he jumped off the side of the mountain. Fran rolled her eyes. “Really Liam?” And then we all jumped.

We were running at high speed over the icy field following Liam. “So Dante. Why exactly do you want to see an Arcane?” Fran queried.
His eyes darkened. But then he looked up and spoke. “It’s a personal quest. And besides I have literally nothing else to do. I have everything I need and tons of spare time.”
“Right. Anyway Liam, how much further do we have.” Fran questioned.
“About fifty feet.” Liam took four more leaps and then stopped abruptly. “Well I think it’s safe to assume he was here a couple seconds ago.” There was an enormous crater with blackened snow caking the bottom. The crater was still brimming with energy so he couldn’t have been gone for long. We were about to start looking in this area when three class A Ifrits jumped out at us. Dante jumped upwards avoiding a fireball thrown his way. I unsheathed my sword and placed both hands on the hilt. Then I stuck it in the ground. Dante had one of the Ifrits diced into tiny cubes before my sword even hit the snow. “Right idea not making him your enemy.” I thought. I charged Chi into my sword and gripped the handle. I swept it round in a circle and sliced upwards in all directions. Liam and Fran knew to get out of the way and Dante had the sense to do so as well. A net of purple slashes flew out in all directions dicing the Ifrits and also leaving numerous slash marks in the ground. “Hey Hex! Warn us next time you use a dangerous attack like that. I could’ve died you know! Luckily there was no Chi in that.” Liam complained.
“Well you survived didn’t you?” I dissmissed him. “Now Chaos would be somewhere in the surrounding area. Let’s-” Dante cut me off.
“There’s no need.” He was staring up at a mountain and to my horror, there was a frightened look on his face. “I haven’t exactly known this guy for more than ten minutes but to scare him?” I looked at the mountain and saw why he was maybe just a little bit frightened. Peering over the mountain was a single bloodshot blue eye with the face shrouded in darkness. There was also a single claw clutching the top of the mountain. The claw had five fingers and each one ended in claw as long as a train. It scared me to for half a second. Then the figure blurred and shot out from behind the mountain. The claw pushed down on the mountain shattering it completely! As the figure soared through the air, A gargantuan shadow was cast. It landed on the floor crackling with lightning. Its legs were two dark blue pillars of flesh and the feet ended in claws like the hands. The arms were like you would expect. The torso was just a swirling blue mass of crackling lightning and the face was just two eyes, a slit for a mouth and a swirling mass for a head. “Chaos. Just as intimidating as the rumours say. And that Aura! God it feels like my head is going to explode!”
“WHO ARE YOU?” Chaos spoke with a deep powerful voice.
“Hellbringers! We are all Hellbringers.” Dante said. He was smart. He knew it would be wise to just keep things as simple as possible. “HELLBRINGERS? AHHH! GOOD. Demon HUNTERS OF THIS WORLD. I WELCOME YOU.” Chaos smiled.
“Really?” I asked. “Reslight didn’t seem too pleased to see us? So why do you welcome us? We were prepared to fight you and all.”
Chaos shrank down to our size. “Reslight is just a little bit overprotective. I however like the Hellbringers. Especially seeing as Hellstorm is pretty much my worst enemy. I’ve been observing you ever since you came here. Your fight against Reslight was actually pretty cool. That was a smart move Hellbringer Hex. Not many people I know could outsmart Reslight like that. And you didn’t even use any Chi attacks! As far as I can sense, you only have one Chi attack.”
“He knows pretty much everything about us. As expected of an Arcane. You can’t hide anything.” I thought. “You’re a hundred percent right. I only have one chi attack. And I can only use aura to augment my skills. In any case I have a couple of questions. But my first one is, what exactly is Hellstorms goal? We know he wants to claim the Arcanes power for himself but why does he want that. Or is he just some sort of psychotic maniac?”
“Well I guess there isn’t any real harm in telling you about that. But first you need to know of the Arcanes origins. Originally, the Arcanes are not even from this world. As a matter of fact we aren’t even from this dimension. There are an infinite number of dimensions which we will never be able to count. However it wasn’t always like that. Originally there was only one dimension.” We listened closely to Chaos’s story. “Oh and just to say, I already know that you aren’t a Hellbringer Dante. I don’t mind.” He concluded. What I had just heard was incredible! Rachael was right! This knowledge might as well have been power incarnate! “Woah.” Was all Fran was capable of saying.
Liam had his jaw touching the ground and my mind might as well have been off. I couldn’t even think straight. “So all of that is true?” I blurted out. “That’s the origins of the Arcanes?”
“Yes.” Chaos said bluntly. “By the way do you have any way of getting back to England? Because if not I have four teleport scrolls here I have no need for. You can use them if you need.”
“Ah thanks.” Liam said. “We haven’t any way of getting back so can we use them?”
“By all means. Follow me. I’ll show you to where I live.” Chaos gestured for us to follow him.

We ran across the icy plains following Chaos. Then suddenly, we stopped. We were in the middle of a plain with three mountains one on each side of us. Chaos pointed one finger up and a bolt of powerful lightning was sent into the sky. The tips of the mountains lit up and started to hum with power. “Watch this.” He whispered. Three streams of white light shot out of the tips of the mountains and formed a triangle! Then a beam shot down and formed a light platform. Chaos got on and we followed suit. The light platform rose and it turns out, the triangle at the top of the mountains was his home! “Fortunately I can keep this place invisible so that I don’t get caught. There’s an invisible roof made of Chi that I can make opaque whenever I want. Platina helped me make this place. She gets on well with me. Now before you guys go off, are you hungry?”
My stomach growled involuntarily and Chaos laughed. “I’ll get some food. Sit down.” Chaos walked off towards an area which I would assume is the kitchen. The entire platform was very primitive. All it consisted of was a small wooden hut which turned out to be Chaos’s bedroom, an enclosure which was the toilet and a table smack bang in the middle which was where we were going to eat. Chaos appeared at the table and set out an entire platter of seafood. I took an entire lobster, twenty shrimp and half a crab. As we ate, we chatted about things. “Hey guys.” Dante began. “I’m gonna stick with you. I have nothing to do and it looks like you could do with some more fighters. Besides, I have nothing else to do.”
“I was hoping you would say that.” I mumbled with a mouthful of shrimp.
“Another guy?” Fran sighed.
“You seem strong. When we get back I wanna have a match with you.” Liam declared.
“Fine by me. I won’t drink any of the blood left on the ground afterwards.”
“Oh. I think I should join in with this one.” I stuffed the entire crab in my mouth and spat the shell back onto my plate when I was done.
“Really guys?” Fran said.
“Seems like you have quite an appetite.” Chaos looked at me.
“Oh yeah! I forgot. Can you let us tag you quick? We want to keep track of all the Arcanes. It’s just an Aura tag. Don’t worry.” Fran asked.
“How about I give you my phone number instead.” Chaos suggested.
“You have a phone?” Liam was surprised.
“What can an Arcane not keep up with the times?” Chaos joked. Fran got out her phone. Chaos told her his number and she gave over Liam, mine and hers. “Dante, do you have a phone?” She asked.
“i phone 5C people.” He grinned.
“tsch. Apple wanker.” Liam muttered.
“At least they’re better than Samsung.” Dante retorted.
“Samsung are leagues ahead of Apple.”
“So why are Apple more successful than Samsung?”
“Who said they were?”
“SHUT UP!” Fran boomed. They both sat down at once. “Good. Now what’s your number Dante.” We all put Dante in our contacts list and he added us. “Just for the record, Nokia beats both Apple and Samsung.” Chaos said quietly. “No. They really don’t.” Liam and Dante said in unison.
“Unless you need a hand grenade.” Dante said.
“Yeah. That Nokia 3310 could kill someone.” Liam agreed.
I was still eating. I sensed a slight abnormality in the Chi surrounding the area. I looked up and swallowed the food in my mouth. “Hey guys. It’s hilarious to watch you argue about which phone company is the best because it is kind of sad. But can we take out the Demons down there before we continue this.” They all looked up at me. Then they stared down below the platform. There was a small group of Demons. Four class A Demons. Two class B ifrits, three class B Maeir’s and a class A Maeir. “Liam Dante, let’s go. Chaos, thanks for the food. We’ll come back for the teleportation but we’ll take care of these guys first. You just watch. I unsheathed my sword. There was a good reason why I had chosen the hunting sword and not any of my others. This sword was light (for me) but could still land very heavy blows and in this sort of snowy environment, it was best to have something like that. I walked to the edge of the platform with Dante and Liam. “You guys just relax and watch. This will be over quite quickly.” I spoke slowly. We shot down towards the ground faster than the speed of sound. I aimed for an Ifrit. At the exact same time, we all sliced through a Demon. Snow was kicked up into the air as I hit the ground. Instantly, an ifrit and two Demons were gone from the group. I sliced through a fireball and cleaved the other Ifrit in half. Dante weaved in and out of the Demons slashing the other two to bits and Liam took care of one of the Maeir’s. I faced the class A Maeir while Dante slashed through the class B Maeir. “I don’t believe you’ve seen my Chi attack.” I said. “Let me show you what it is.” The class A Maeir had taken on the form of a grey scaled Wyvern at this point. It flew up into the air. I gathered Chi into my legs and shot off of the ground. I gripped my sword as I flew towards the Maeir. I swept the sword upwards and sliced diagonally downwards with all my strength. “Moon Fang judgement!” Millions of silver Chi needles shot towards the Maeir slicing it to bits. The needles crashed into the mountain behind it making it explode. Luckily that didn’t affect Chaos’s home. “You did well but there was one problem. You died as soon as you lay eyes on me.” I landed on the floor. “Come on guys. Let’s go and teleport back to England. Its already five O clock in the morning.”

Chaos let down the lift and we ascended back up to his home. We were carrying the corpses of the Demons. We had to completely disintegrate the other corpses. We couldn’t sell those. These Demons just looked like mutated humans but Ifrits do not and the Class B Maeir’s had taken on Leopard forms so they were of no use. Chaos stared at me with gleaming eyes and admiration. “That was awesome! I had wanted to see your attack. But my question is what kind of theories are the press going to come up with to explain the destruction of the mountain? Probably Aliens or they might blame the Russians as they always do. In any case. The scrolls are in my room.” We followed Chaos into his room and he placed the scrolls on the floor. We stood on the scrolls and Chaos placed his hands together. Then he sliced his thumb with a small knife and spread some on each of the scrolls. “Load the scrolls with some Chi and say the name of the place you want to go. Be precise. If you say London it might drop you in the middle of Oxford Circus. And with Demons on your back that wouldn’t be good. See you soon.” Chaos waved as we chanted the address of our house in unison and with a puff of smoke, we were gone.


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Pretty good. Parts seemed too factual and didn’t have much emotion in it. I’d also like to see a wider and more creative vocabulary of words used. Also don’t all action manga/anime have people shout their moves?


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CATsuya Meow wrote: Pretty good. Parts seemed too factual and didn’t have much emotion in it. I’d also like to see a wider and more creative vocabulary of words used. Also don’t all action manga/anime have people shout their moves?



well a lot of insipiration came from comics, anime, mangas etc. I’ll edit ASAP and re-post.


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CATsuya Meow wrote: Pretty good. Parts seemed too factual and didn’t have much emotion in it. I’d also like to see a wider and more creative vocabulary of words used. Also don’t all action manga/anime have people shout their moves?



ok. I literally just did this edit. small things like changing normal sentences to complex or what have you. Please bold anything you believe i can change.



“A vampire.” I laughed. “You expect me to believe that?” All emotion faded quickly from Dantes face as he stared at me, watching me laugh. Then. Without warning, red swirled into his eyes, the air became thick with tension and he snarled, producing an inhuman noise from his throat. He floated into the air slowly. Hovering there. I stopped laughing and stared at him. He opened his mouth wide and revealed a set of pointed razor sharp fangs. He held his hand outward showing off white claws. He had my complete attention now. Then he disappeared. One minute he was there and next he was gone. “I don’t joke around.” A deep voice thick with contempt whispered into my ear. I felt a thin sharp nail pressing against me neck. Not much pressure was applied at all yet I knew that a little movement would make all my blood spill out staining the white snow scarlet. “It seems you weren’t joking.” I showed no fear as I spoke.
Dante burst into laughter that most likely was forced. “I wasn’t actually going to kill you. That wouldn’t be the best sign that I wanted to team up with you.” His nails shrunk and he slapped me on the shoulder.
“But if you are a vampire, how can you eat mist?” Liam questioned.
“Now that is a long story. But to make a long story short, my abilities are the normal things that a vampire has if we go by stories. Superhuman strength and speed, flight and I have to consume blood in order survive. I never consume human blood. I use animal blood. But I have another ability. Illusions. Me eating the mist was an illusion. I didn’t actually do it. Right now the mist is still here but my illusion powers are making it seem otherwise.”
“Well then.” I began. “Do you have any idea where Chaos is Dante?”
“Not a clue.” Dante smiled and gave me a thumbs up. His entire personality seemed like it was fake. He seemed suspicious yet I did nothing but go along with the situation.
“Well Liam, time for you to do your thing. Sense out Chaos.” Liam got up reluctantly and walked over to the edge of the mountain. Then he closed his eyes and pressed his palms together. A ripple of green Chi came out of him and spread throughout the entire area. He stayed in that position for three minutes and then he opened his eyes. “Got him.” Liam said. “Let’s go.” And he jumped off the side of the mountain. Fran rolled her eyes. “Really Liam?” And then we all jumped.


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Eien no yoru wrote:

CATsuya Meow wrote: Pretty good. Parts seemed too factual and didn’t have much emotion in it. I’d also like to see a wider and more creative vocabulary of words used. Also don’t all action manga/anime have people shout their moves?



ok. I literally just did this edit. small things like changing normal sentences to complex or what have you. Please bold anything you believe i can change.



“A vampire.” I laughed. “You expect me to believe that?” All emotion faded quickly from Dantes face as he stared at me, watching me laugh. Then. Without warning, red swirled into his eyes, the air became thick with tension and he snarled, producing an inhuman noise from his throat. He floated into the air slowly. Hovering there. I stopped laughing and stared at him. He opened his mouth wide and revealed a set of pointed razor sharp fangs. He held his hand outward showing off white claws. He had my complete attention now. Then he disappeared. One minute he was there and next he was gone. “I don’t joke around.” A deep voice thick with contempt whispered into my ear. I felt a thin sharp nail pressing against me neck. Not much pressure was applied at all yet I knew that a little movement would make all my blood spill out staining the white snow scarlet. “It seems you weren’t joking.” I showed no fear as I spoke.
Dante burst into laughter that most likely was forced. “I wasn’t actually going to kill you. That wouldn’t be the best sign that I wanted to team up with you.” His nails shrunk and he slapped me on the shoulder.
“But if you are a vampire, how can you eat mist?” Liam questioned.
“Now that is a long story. But to make a long story short, my abilities are the normal things that a vampire has if we go by stories. Superhuman strength and speed, flight and I have to consume blood in order survive. I never consume human blood. I use animal blood. But I have another ability. Illusions. Me eating the mist was an illusion. I didn’t actually do it. Right now the mist is still here but my illusion powers are making it seem otherwise.”
“Well then.” I began. “Do you have any idea where Chaos is Dante?”
“Not a clue.” Dante smiled and gave me a thumbs up. His entire personality seemed like it was fake. He seemed suspicious yet I did nothing but go along with the situation.
“Well Liam, time for you to do your thing. Sense out Chaos.” Liam got up reluctantly and walked over to the edge of the mountain. Then he closed his eyes and pressed his palms together. A ripple of green Chi came out of him and spread throughout the entire area. He stayed in that position for three minutes and then he opened his eyes. “Got him.” Liam said. “Let’s go.” And he jumped off the side of the mountain. Fran rolled her eyes. “Really Liam?” And then we all jumped.


Other than that, it’s good


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CATsuya Meow wrote:

Eien no yoru wrote:

CATsuya Meow wrote: Pretty good. Parts seemed too factual and didn’t have much emotion in it. I’d also like to see a wider and more creative vocabulary of words used. Also don’t all action manga/anime have people shout their moves?



ok. I literally just did this edit. small things like changing normal sentences to complex or what have you. Please bold anything you believe i can change.



“A vampire.” I laughed. “You expect me to believe that?” All emotion faded quickly from Dantes face as he stared at me with a cold expression. Then. Without warning, red swirled into his eyes, the air became thick with tension and he snarled, producing an inhuman noise from his throat. He floated into the air slowly. Hovering there. I stopped laughing and stared at him. He opened his mouth wide and revealed a set of pointed razor sharp fangs. He held his hand outward showing off white claws. He had my complete attention now. Then he disappeared. One minute he was there and next he was gone. “I don’t joke around.” A deep voice thick with contempt whispered into my ear. I felt a thin sharp nail pressing against me neck. Not much pressure was applied at all yet I knew that a little movement would make all my blood spill out staining the white snow scarlet. “It seems you weren’t joking.” I suppressed the little fear i felt.
Dante burst into laughter that most likely was forced. “I wasn’t actually going to kill you. That wouldn’t be the best sign that I wanted to team up with you.” His nails shrunk and he slapped me on the shoulder.
“But if you are a vampire, how can you eat mist?” Liam questioned.
“Now that is a long story. But to make a long story short, my abilities are the normal things that a vampire has if we go by stories. Superhuman strength and speed, flight and I have to consume blood in order survive. I never consume human blood. I use animal blood. But I have another ability. Illusions. Me eating the mist was an illusion. I didn’t actually do it. Right now the mist is still here but my illusion powers are making it seem otherwise.”
“Well then.” I began. “Do you have any idea where Chaos is Dante?”
“Not a clue.” Dante smiled and gave me a thumbs up. His entire personality seemed like it was fake. He seemed suspicious yet I did nothing but go along with the situation.
“Well Liam, time for you to do your thing. Sense out Chaos.” Liam got up reluctantly and walked over to the edge of the mountain. Then he closed his eyes and pressed his palms together. A ripple of green Chi came out of him and spread throughout the entire area. He remained perfectly stagnant for three minutes and then he opened his eyes. “Got him.” Liam said. “Let’s go.” And he jumped off the side of the mountain. Fran rolled her eyes. “Really Liam?” And then we all jumped.


Other than that, it’s good



this better?


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I’m not gay I just like semen

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Yeah, better


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CATsuya Meow wrote: Yeah, better



thanks.


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Augustine Yuu wrote:

The Dan Hibiki wrote: I’m not gay I just like cocks

I’m not gay I just like semen

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